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Theme
Are there any challenges you would like to have a go at one day?
My essay
One day I would like to start my own bookstore or library. I want to start my business related to books and make a space for people to read books in a calm atmosphere.
ChatGPT
Your essay is clear and well-written, but there's a minor adjustment to improve clarity:
"One day, I would like to start my own bookstore or library. I want to establish a business related to books and create a space where people can read in a calm atmosphere."
Explanation:
Adding a comma after "One day" helps to separate the introductory phrase from the main clause.
Replacing "make" with "establish" provides a clearer description of starting a business.
Your essay effectively communicates your desire to pursue entrepreneurship in the book industry. Well done!
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