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What is your life dream?
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I have some dreams. First, I want to get a master's degree in education within a few years. Second, after my retirement, I want to establish my own private library for citizens.
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Your essay is clear, but there's a minor adjustment for clarity and style. Here's the revised version:
"I have some dreams. First, I want to earn a master's degree in education within a few years. Second, after my retirement, I aim to establish my own private library for citizens."
Here are the explanations for the changes:
- Changed "get a master's degree" to "earn a master's degree" for a more formal expression.
- Adjusted the phrasing for better flow and readability.
These changes aim to enhance the overall coherence and fluency of your essay. Feel free to ask if you have any questions or if you'd like further assistance!
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