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Theme: "Do you visit anywhere often?"
My essay: " I visit the bookstore, Tsutaya Books, every weekend . Of course I often purchase some book at the store, but I enjoy checking newly published books."
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Your essay is clear, but there's a minor adjustment for clarity and style. Here's the revised version:
"I visit the bookstore, Tsutaya Books, every weekend. While I do often purchase books at the store, I particularly enjoy checking out newly published ones."
Here are the explanations for the changes:
- Added "While I do" for variety and a smoother transition.
- Changed "but I enjoy" to "I particularly enjoy" for emphasis and clarity.
These changes aim to enhance the overall coherence and fluency of your essay. Feel free to ask if you have any questions or if you'd like further assistance!
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